This book is a ridiculous mash-up of Twilight and 50 Shades of Grey for young adults. Too bad, because it started out great, until they added the vampire.
Started out an intelligent, independent girl
-Got flustered when she met the vampire, ignored the danger, becomes weak and relies on him for everything, desperate to please him, can’t live without him, loves his family, has untold power none of them expected and is capable of another twilight feat that I won’t spoil.
– Super Rich, Rude, Smart, Stylish, “young” but incredibly accomplished, concerned with how much food and exercise the girl gets etc, etc. Christian Grey clone but also vampire who is irresistibly drawn to the girl that he doesn’t want to live without, who loves her despite the rules saying he shouldn’t, tries to warn her away, but watched her sleep and stalks her, takes her to meet his family, etc. etc. stupidity
Overall frustrating. It needs more of the alchemy plot and less twilight/50shades. Even the major plot points match up. Its frustrating and disappointing how little originality there is now.
And as if this isn’t frustrating enough, it was actually horribly written. As a reader, I shouldn’t be revising your grammar and feeling like I should send you all my notes. There was such awkward run-on sentences that I had to re-read large chunks just to figure out what they meant. A paragraph is made of multiple sentences, not one. The funny part is that my own writing isn’t even all that great and my experience with it goes no farther than research papers for school, but even I will notice when you use the same adjective too many times.